In response to Iam Who Iam’s weekly poetic challenge for this week …
I have made my very first attempt at ‘Unrhymed Iambic Pentameter”, aka “Blank Verse”.
I have been musing to my husband about experimenting with some classical poetic styles
& this was the perfect opportunity to give it a try.
You can read more about this specific style here …
Poetic Challenge: Blank Verse,
& read Iam Who Iam’s own contribution here …
Blank Verse About Source of My Morals
I really, really enjoyed myself.
At first the urge to rhyme was overwhelming but as I let go the words started to flow,
the whole exercise became quite passionate & I actually found it hard to stop.
OK, here it is.
No snickering now.
Judgement, Justice & God
The need to try to judge my fellow man.
What folly could be worse & yet I err
in that direction time & time again.
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When’er I hear of some injustice done
the need for balance fills my outraged heart.
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A violent act against a tiny child,
makes violence flare inside my troubled mind.
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Religious persecution makes me scream.
How dare they thus, & say “It’s in God’s name”.
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As if God needs the help of tiny man!
As if God were some petty, mindless thug.
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A bigot judging what we eat or wear,
or when, or where, or how we choose to pray.
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Who dares to try to keep God in a box,
to claim that God belongs to them & they
alone are qualified to speak for him?
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God is not so small as to be confined
by petty barriers of religion.
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Religion created by man for man’s
own questionable & dubious ends.
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Religion worshipping a tiny God
created by man in man’s own image.
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God is Great inDeed, inWord, inCreed &
those who dare to speak & act in his name
might want to think again of how they’ll fare
when face to face with that which, absolute,
is truly judge & executioner
of all that ever was, is & will be.
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The need for justice burns within my heart.
I crave the balanced flat-line of debts met.
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But how is Justice possible for man,
who lies & cheats in every way he can?
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A story told from one side may seem true,
but when compared with someone else’s tale
some elements may surface that will start
deliberations new & clearer still
as everyone elaborates, the frame
must grow & shrink to fit the changing ‘Truth’.
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As Justice tries to pick her way through all,
& seeing clearly through the eyes of God,
unravels all the chaos man creates,
I hope & trust that she will find at last
the route to source & centre of all wrong.
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Make no mistake, we none of us is right.
Our judgements flawed & blinkered at the best.
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Our sense of Justice suited to ourselves.
Even our God is shrunk to fit our needs.
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& so to you who read this verse I say,
“ Judge others not, just do what’s right yourself”.
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i thought it was really good 🙂
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Thanks, I’m really glad you enjoyed it. I just took a peek at your blog & I love it. We seem to share some of the same views. I’ll definitely be back to read more 🙂
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An exquisite piece of writing with a very powerful message.
Thank you for sharing.
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My pleasure. Thank you for reading 🙂
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Fantastic (both in content and rhythm). My motivation for the challenge was to encourage people (me included) to experiment with different poetic structures without any expectation of a well-polished finished product. You’ve exceeded my expectations by offering a poem so well-polished, it shines from beginning to end. Thanks for writing and sharing it (and I DO agree with all it says).
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Wow, I’m really glad you enjoyed it so much. Some poems really write themselves & that was one of them. Completely spontaneous. I think I’ve wanted to get a lot of that off my chest for a while & was just waiting for a suitable outlet lol. It was great fun & I look forward to future challenges 🙂
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That was really amazing, it read and flowed so well.
I also totally agree with the message.
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I’m really pleased you liked it & even more pleased that you agree with the message. It just sort of happened lol. Thanks for reading it & appreciating it 🙂
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